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Dream~Rose · Posted: Sat Oct 11, 2008 5:26 am Post subject: Urge To Lie. A Poem

Urges come in many ways,
At different times on different days,
Some of these urges are normal of course,
Like the urge for water,
Drunken with force.

But do, Pray tell, this feeling I get,
An urge to lie,
Like that dangerious bullet in a russian roulette.

Urges come from far and wide,
Some are simple but some are snide,
A beautiful women sitting by a shore,
Raped and beaten which causes uproar.

But do, Pray tell, this feeling I get,
An urge to lie,
Please don't be upset.

The man who onced loved,
Died today,
His urged to rape,
Lead him astray.

But do, Pray tell, this feeling I get,
An urge to lie,
Such a seedy brunette.

So please, pray for me,
Tear me away from this debauchery,
I've lied many times, for attention they say,
Though it comes back to haunt me, but I say touche'

But do, Pray tell, this feeling I get,
An urge to be noticed,
In the forever sunset.

Urge to lie, By Natasha Gallagher.

Keeper · Posted: Sat Oct 11, 2008 4:30 pm Post subject:

Hmmm. A strong poem you have here, Tasha. Yet, I have a hard time gripping what most poems try to describe, I can guess that this involves the raped woman making up lies about the rape, thus causing the rapist to face a punishment worser than usual rape cases involve? If not, at least I produced a well thought out notion. :P

In all seriousness, lovely style of writing, fine vocabulary, and grammar as well. I do hope you're entering this into a contest or showing it to others besides us. It's a wonderful piece that should be shared, to me at least. Splendid work!

Dream~Rose · Posted: Sat Oct 11, 2008 4:32 pm Post subject:

Very nice notion!

But, it's about the liar, the liar spoke those words, about rape and death. Very dangerious lies.

Keeper · Posted: Sat Oct 11, 2008 4:36 pm Post subject:

Oh, so I was close enough? Well, that's reassuring at least. XD Again though, that's a very strong theme, especially when you have people dumb enough in reality to do such risky things. Fine use of using that issue then, it worked out very well. :D

Twilight · Posted: Sat Oct 11, 2008 4:39 pm Post subject:

I liked it so much, yet it was so sad!! ;-; Waaaaaiiiii!! Group hug everyone! >.<

Dream~Rose · Posted: Sat Oct 11, 2008 5:32 pm Post subject:

Keeper wrote: Oh, so I was close enough? Well, that's reassuring at least. XD Again though, that's a very strong theme, especially when you have people dumb enough in reality to do such risky things. Fine use of using that issue then, it worked out very well. :D

I used to be one of them 3 years ago ^^ retelling an old secret

Keeper · Posted: Sun Oct 12, 2008 2:16 am Post subject:

That's actually very strong of you to do, taking a passed weakness about yourself and subjecting it into your current skills. I commend you for doing such a willpowered act, my dear. And to share, I too have given my risky lies in the past. Perhaps not as serious, but I still think back on them and wonder why I wasn't caught. Eh, at any case, you did yourself a good thing. It takes a lot for someone to attempt a secret. c:

Twilight · Posted: Sun Oct 12, 2008 5:14 pm Post subject:

Mmhm, I agree. ^^ It takes alot from someone to retell an old weakness of yours and place it into a poem~

I may possibly write something soon, I dunno. ^^; It's a little personal.

James Sunderland · Posted: Mon Oct 13, 2008 5:07 am Post subject:

Wow...I thought I was being weird, but Keeper actually got the same thought as mine! XD

Really, such notion was what giving me a strange feeling when I read this poem of yours miss Tasha...Such splendid piece of literature! =D

Chaosrider · Joined: 07 Nov 2006 Posts: 544 Location: Staring your soul

Yah, actually this poem gave me a strange air since the beginning but i quite understand bit by bit.. its inspiring, i think you'd make more of them. I just hope this doesn't leave you some remarks of the past, i'm sure you can dealt and go forward with it.

Amazing Tasha, you somehow made me feel better n_n